Lately, I’ve discovered a principle about writing. Too get closer to the reader, that is, to make the reader feel like they are connection to the characters, I review a scene to make sure there is just the right amount of internal monologue.
Internal monologue can help in several ways. Besides helping the reader connect with characters, it can create subtext. The external actions of a character my say one thing, but the internal thoughts may say another.
It can also create variety in the writing. I try to use a combination of physical action, dialogue, and description. An internal thought here and there can add a little spice to a scene.
After rewriting a scene, I make sure I’ve included at least some internal monologue. I usually put direct thoughts of a character in italics. It’s a great way to pull the reader in and show what’s really happening beneath the surface.
The Oblivion’s Hope team tries to help a small town being eaten by a large creature. Jad Cannon gets a big surprise and Phia wonders if she made the right decision about her career.
See the latest episode of my story Oblivion’s Hope.
science fiction / space opera
Rhisk starts his new duties for Legendaries Incorporated and disaster ensues.
See the latest episode of my story Legendaries.
fantasy / urban fantasy.
Bandonn realizes he needs to get aboard The Planned Happenstance, but not for the reason he tells everyone. Agents Kessla and Esh try to negotiate with rebels of The Escape, but their plans go very wrong.
See the latest episodes of my story Normous.
Andrew M. Friday 
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